My script has gotten so cheesy/cliche too fast. I'm only on the 12th page, and I don't think it really fits. It's a little too strong for my script.

Do you guys think I should keep that part (it was a kissing scene between two friends since childhood after one of them had a breakup) and put it later? Or should I just delete it all together?

If you guys need more information, then please state it, and I'll give you whatever you need. :]

Thanks.

It sounds as though it is time for something terrible to happen to your hero or heroine that makes them have to fight and overcome it. I think that conflict stops a story from becoming too cheesy. Just my thoughts.

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Funny thing is that I totally forgot about conflict happening.
It IS about time for my inciting incident...
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