Right now, I don't think it's going to be all that productive to worry about hitting the one page/one minute thing. From the small excerpt you provided, your action paragraphs are actually a lot thinner than you're expecting.
"Pitch blackness is suddenly partially illuminated by a small light. The light plays over the various instruments in the room before landing on the drawers used to hold the bodies."
...can also be written as:
"Pitch black. Suddenly pierced by a pen light.
It roves over a steel table, tray of scalpels and a drill. Stops on the storage drawers."
In your example, the light can travel all over the room or only hit one object before reaching its goal. Both ways need a different amount of screen time.
Hitting the one page/one minute thing is more in how you say something than what you say.
"She laughs."
or
"She laughs like she's just been freed from the prison of her mind for the final time."
...will take up the exact same amount of time on the screen, but one is obviously longer on the page. And it's something that can be easily taken care of in a rewrite until you have the instincts to nail it the first time through.
Does any of this make sense?
In my opinion it's not important enough of an aspect to let it bog you down when you have so little time to finish the first draft. So write away and worry about the minutiae later.
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